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Pent up frustrations make me feel like I'm about to redline.
Kick the fucking clutch to get my shit into gear.
They say "live fast, die pretty." This might just be my year.
So much weight on my shoulders the mental fog got me feeling loose.
And you all just stand by watching the inevitable wreck of life's constant abuse.
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Had someone mention that I should consider removing the curse words to be able to post it more places. What do you think? Leave it in or take it out or just have 2 versions of it?
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Do you like it, hate it, love it? Why? Let me know! I welcome the constructive criticism.
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Pete Bit
It's cool, modern and i like it. Mind that i'm no expert :) If you REALLY want some criticism, from purely technical point of view, i would think about rhythm a little bit more in next poems. Some verses are much longer than others when you read it out loud. But i like it as it is :)
Thank you!! :) I'll definitely keep that in mind!
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