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Lock of a prized golden brown
lays lifelessΒ
almost unscathed by ageΒ
but truth lies
down like a needle
in the hay
the thought of finding it
once wounded me
Now shining, illuminatingΒ
a precious metal reminder
of time
passing away
carefully, sifting out
the silver lining
that some may never live to see
and cradle it greedilyΒ
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DeryckEleven
I don't usually *get* poetry, but I do like your word choices.
Thank you ^-^ I like to play with words much like an artist does with paint on canvas.
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Aron Bowen
Enjoyed it, I love writing that is a little vague and leaves things open to interpretation, letting the reader fill in gaps with their mind. I write in a similar way, probably why I dig it so much.
Thanks, Aron! Yeah I really like to write esoteric poems. It puts an artistic or romantic lens on snapshots in my life. :)
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Glad you're able to share!
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Extended Blundering
Oh this one is intriguing...correct me if I'm wrong but is this about a lover mourning a deceased one? precious metal being a wedding band they have conflicting feelings about now, and precious brown lock of hair the only last cherished "unaged" piece left in contrast to the reality of the situation?
Thatβs a beautiful interpretation! I love this and will not be correcting you! You can take my work to mean whatever you like :)
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that is truly the trademark of good penmanship, bravo!
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<3 thank you!
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Not completely satisfied with this one but itβs only a draft