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6am
sweat rolling off the forehead like raindrops, coating the skin.
screaming summernightsbonfirescreamingscreamingscreaming.
the tension, no, sweetness of a hello.
the tension, no, BITTERNESS of a goodbye.
sweat,
a dream falling out of the mind,
a thought laying dead in the softness of your mindearthbrain.
sweat,
to be in your dreams is to be loved...
or something
20/10/2021
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STRAWBERRYCYANIDE_
i LOVE what you did with the diction of "sweetness of a hello/bitterness of a goodbye", that part rules. Another part i love is how it deliberately falls flat at the end with "or something", and it reminds me of how during the wee hours of the morning, like 6am, there are these different thoughts in your head and some can be incredibly specific, like the sweat you describe, and others are just "something". love this sm.
OMG !!! thank you so much
i'm glad you like it
i love making something i write fall flat at the end
it's exactly how you described !!!
you have a great mind
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