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We had a fight this night ;
I thought it was the usual way ;
You had the right !
But thou temper began to fray ;
You made my herte, crumble !
And then my thoughts, began to rumble ;
Why are you so heartless ?
Although I have a house, I am now homeless !
When, I heard it from thou
I got tears rolling down my cheek !
But, then I realised I got only a few-
Tears left, For I am a freak ;
Thine home became a ruin of thy past !
And I, myself will be perished ;
For my thoughts are abnormally fast !
Alas I let ya know I cherished-
Though, Yet I shall be no more...!!!
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ferretinsoup
Oh this one rattles1!! The punctuation dances like it’s trying to escape the page, every semicolon feels like a gasp for air, every exclamation mark a little lightning strike. I love how it swings between “thou” and “ya” like time itself got dizzy.
Maybe it’s about heartbreak, or ego death, or both.? I can’t tell, but i don’t think it wants me to- it just spins, beautifully, like a broken music box that still insists on singing.
“Though, yet I shall be no more”- that’s not despair, that’s theater1!! That’s fireworks at a funeral1!! I like to think the speaker didn’t die at all, they just evaporated into rhythm, became a punctuation ghost haunting the space between two semicolons. Delightful, strange, doomed, a beautiful poem indeed1!! ◝(ᵔᗜᵔ)◜
Well, I wrote it when I was experiencing some melancholic state.
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And it shows in the best way possible1!! Your writing is very interesting to me (˶' ꒳ '˶)
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