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This is some sort of poetry (I say some sort of because it doesn't contain rhymes😭) I wrote about my friend :3 not romantic even if it sound cheesy. ---- I just love having someone to love <33
"Oh to love a someone with my being, with my soul.. but oh, the hurt that comes with it, when I have to watch you go, for another. It's like watching a cigarette extinguish right in front of you, way far before being consumed into ashes, yet still passed to another. Oh, what wouldn't I give to have you, but our love is crooked. We don't need such thing as 'us'. Maybe..
Oh, my first love.. or maybe my 4th.. you're still here with me. Sharing the same, usual view, that we share every morning, as we talk about another.. and I wouldn't change anything.
Maybe my 'true soulmate' is a friend.. and it's platonic.. but I love it, even when it burns..
maybe, being an ashtray doesn't sound so bad, if it's your cigarette I'd have to endure being extinguished against me, cause God, as bad as it burns,
I will come back for more."
She's not a perfect friend but neither am I, that's what makes everything so special about friendships, no? Whatever. Everyone has their fair share of sins and mistakes :> that's just a parenthesis
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mina >_<
Criticism is welcome!!
Stanpy
very endearing and cute, you must be a great friend c:
Aaa THANKYUU >.<
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𝐈𝒔𝒂 🦇✩
That’s so poetic, I love it!! You should write more sometimes, I love your metaphors :D
Thank you so much
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MrKha
as an asexual who strongly values platonic love, i can heavily relate to this poem. its a shame that ppl always put romantic love above platonic when any type of love relies on human connection regardless of who that 'a someone' may be, like a friend in ur case. amazing poem, keep it up!!
Thank you so much! I'm glad someone relates, really appreciate it <33
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JJ_DaVinci
Love this line:
"She's not a perfect friend but neither am I, that's what makes everything so special about friendships, no?"
Thank you so much ^^ I'm glad you like it <33
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iileoxcz
So good :3
Thank you so much! ^^ <33
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anna
Wow!!!!!
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Bella
Ok I love this so muchhhhhh🫶🏼🫶🏼🫶🏼
Thank youu!! X3
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sunny
this is such a sweet poem!! i love the emphasis on loving someone platonically, especially since that love is very often undervalued in compared to romantic love! and don't worry - poetry doesn't always have to revolve around rhymes. i also write poetry without rhymes, and many others as well!
the distinct "a someone" rather than saying "someone" is interesting! while i think it can easily come off as jarring, i think it adds something unique to the poem!! was it purposefully like that to give emphasis on "someone", on the speaker processing their love towards someone? i also found the overall, consistent, cigarette metaphor very interesting! keep writing :>!!
Oh wow I appreciate this comment so so much
I used a someone instead of someone as I wanted to express the importance this person carries, kind of the contrast of "a nobody" as it's not just any other someone, but rather somebody with high value (for the speaker), though the way you interpreted it isn't exactly wrong, and i think it's actually interesting. And sorry if it comes off as awkward or anything I'm still kinda new to this writing thing english is also not my first language and im trying to develop, so your comment is really encouraging :3. Thank you soso much for taking your time to read it and comment on it ^^
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Helpp I wanted to say improve not develop
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aw ty!! im super glad :>!
ooo thank you so much for the insight... i really appreciate the wording of "a someone" even more and it adds so much! i definitely did not catch that meaning to contrast "a nobody"... that is just so insanely creative and unique!! oh don't worry about it! i'm glad that my comment provided you with some encouragement!! you're very welcome!! this poem already shows you have potential; and so i wish you well on your journey towards improvement ^^!!
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Thank youu
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YW :3!!
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Hii
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Oh Heyy :D
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