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i've found myself out on the water's edge again
the water is restrained, gently lapping at the rocks i stand on
it's depths are pitch in the night, spots of white projected onto it's gently bobbing surface from the heavens above
it might be nice to let my feet dip into the shallows
the night air is still dry and warm, the water's chill touch could quench
glancing left and right, i find nobody with me on this isolated embankment
observed by no one, yet still agitated by some prickle on the neck, i still find myself out on the water's edge
one time poetry thingy. i used to want to write poetry but i always forced the profoundness too much (am i doing the same thing here? hopefully not) and plus i never knew what message i wanted to write about. this came to me randomly though, i dont know how good it is but i like it. feel free to analyse it or whatever. no fancy layout because im still working on my new profile. i kinda wanna improve my writing, its been a while since i wrote something seriously, any poem recommendations? i think i need to expand my vocabulary (highschool me would be so disappointed in my illiteracy)
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str("astro rocket")
i luv this!!! i don't think ur forcing the profoundness at all, in fact i love ur balance between poetic depth and casualty!! also the title reminds me of "the view from halfway down" was that on purpose
ahhh thank you!! i wish it was on purpose that wouldve been rlly smart loll, its such a good poem which is crazy considering its from bojack (the writing is so good i need to finish it at some point). initially the poem was going to share some themes with that one but i decided id say a lot more if i didnt clutter the poem with too many ideas.
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dextros
ts feel like literature club