Writing stuff- Please give advice!

please give critiques, i want to get better.

i wish i could take a vacuum to that vacuum of space

and swallow up all the fog

i want to take the nothing, and turn it

into something to understand.

it stays behind a veil, or a bedsheet,

and draws me further in

but never lets me fathom what's hiding

it bites when the sun is high overhead.

i wish that it will open itself up one day,

or just carry itself downstream,

so that i can do that too.