does my writing suck?? spacehey pls help me

I love writing 4 fun and i've started writing this story about 2 best friends (Felix + Oliver) and essentially them doing wacky stuff while also trying to cope with the fact they're transforming into vampires. these are the first 2 pages. do they suck?? do you guys have any advice to make this better?? 

https://docs.google.com/document/d/17n-ivvtf57SUWSXkEfDI4Ld5j1bNEIWEKWihdrOIDZY/edit?usp=sharing