The girl I once loved ( I take criticism )

  The girl I once loved

        TW FOR IMPLIED DEATH AND ED       

August 26th

      I walked into the school bathroom, oh it’s her again. The girl with the black curls, sage eyes, and lovely perfume. She’s perfect, but I could never make a move. She waves at me, wait.. she waved at me! “Come here” she yelled, and well I don’t want to disapprove so I do! “I like your hair, do you straighten it?” I tremble at her words. Should I say yes, no, maybe so? I’m not sure. I don’t wanna be a nerd! So, I responded. “No, it’s naturally this straight.” CRAP! Do I sound mean? She giggled at me, hey she giggled! “Well, it’s cute. My name is Francine, how about you?” her voice is so cool, I nearly forgot my name! “Oh, my name's Raul!” We talked for a bit. I think we’re friends now! I hope I don’t look unfit!

August 30th

       Oh. My. GOSH!!! We’re like best friends! She even lets me eat her posh bread! Oh, oh, and she has a tattoo on her hip! She’s so cool, I just want to kiss her lips! She asked me if I have a boyfriend, is that a sign? Wait.. does she think i’m straight as a line? Either way, cool she likes me! Oh wait, I'm gonna go get some food for free with her!

September 2nd

          She’s kind of distant now, did I do something wrong? Maybe if i’m skinnier and quieter we’ll get along! I want her to like me back, is that too much to ask? I’ll limit my calories, 900 is too much, I’ll do 500 or such. I hope she sees I’m prettier after this, I hope she doesn’t dismiss me after this.

September 6th

          She stopped talking to me! Plus, I'm not even skinny! Dieting doesn’t work, I wanna get mini! I could take some pills to help, I’ll go to the pharmacy. I hope no one dwells.

           FRANCINE'S POV

September 17th

    I can’t believe I like a girl. If my mom finds out she might just hurl! I can’t push her away anymore, I love her! I’ll go to her house while my mom’s at work. I gently open her door, it smells like crap ! Nothing like before, I called out her name. “Raul, Raul!” Just to find her by the wall. “Raul, I need to tell you something” I blurted out quick as can be. She seems pale, I touch her shoulder, it’s cold as ice! I turn her over, my eyes wide. The girl I once loved, no longer by my side.



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