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Shine.
Good or bad ? bad or good ? was I both ? or none ? I am a wave, I carry with me the lucidity of the sun in its depths, but I always lost crumbs as I sank deeper.
I am a star, I shine, but not enough, I was neither sirus, nor the sun of our crowd, nor vega, nor its luminous pile of dust. I was none of that, I was nothing.
I was neither the wave and its ocean, nor the star and its planets, I was only the void in between.
The white sea foam that was carried away in its own entropy, the dark void of our galaxy that separated its celestial bodies, I was the foundations, not the building, the gravity, not the star.
Because no matter how many times I tried to get closer to the light, I only got burned times and times again, because yes, I would never shine myself.
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WrongName_001
This poem is pretty deep, for me bring some thoughts from try to fit (or be trapped) in a strange place or time and it makes you feel you don't belong of the whole everyting and if you really belong some place after all.
It's an unbelievable poem (it's a poetic way to describe the atmosphere)
You're doing great =]
Thanks you ! and yes if was the subject I wanted to talk about, also the fact of not feeling good enough, I apreciate you take the time to check it.
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NIXIS
I can't recommend or say anything about it since English is not my language either. I know this is your first poem in English but I have to say I loved it, especially the second paragraph where you mention stars. ^^
I still appreciate alottt the fact that you took the time to read it, idm if english isn't your mother tougue, I still find the opinion useful ! and I am a big space nerd so I like to mention some stuff in the poems ><
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lu_archive
OMG I LOVE IT !! IT´S SO BEAUTIFUL
TYSM ILY ! hope the meaning was at least obv
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YESSS
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