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I wish someone would write about me.
To write a poem about how much they love me.
To be loved is to be written.
The love that they have for me to be etched into paper.
Every letter written with love.
I want to be the poem.
I want to see the love through rhymes and similes.
Written in hyperboles and metaphors.
I want someone else to be the poet.
For someone to put their all into a word.
For a poem to be written just for me.
I want to be the poem, not the poet.
And to be loved by a writer.
Is to be loved by words.
-S.DC
P.S: This is my original work! Please do not take it😔this isn't my best poem btw I just wanted to get my feelings out there. Lmk how you like it!
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eVicted
I think this is a lovely concept and you fleshed it out really nicely. The raw emotion and desire is clear. If you're not looking for advice, ignore this, but I personally think you could try to "show, don't tell". The idea comes across very clear, but in order to make a poem more impactful you need to find a way to express your thoughts in a more nuanced manner, otherwise you end up repeating yourself and the subject becomes somewhat cliche. Your language and use of vocabulary are great, keep up the good work!
PS I am no expert, this is purely my opinion!
thank you! This was one of my older poems so I'm aware it isn't good lol
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i think it was rlly good tho no shade
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