sending this to my theatre teacher, giv feedback please

Still on the topic of the Phantom, I believe I would be a great fit for the role. I have the voice for it, with his vocals being those of a baritenor range—which I can hit. I also have the acting abilities, as I have practiced the show for quite a while. Also, I can provide the costume myself, as they have great pieces on Amazon—the whole set is under $40, minus the pantsuit (which I own), a binder, and some boots to make me taller. After all, 5’10 is the optimal height for the Phantom, as peer-reviewed by me and two others who have played the role. I have memorized Act 1’s songs, and I am working on Act 2, meaning I am ahead of the game—also meaning more time to work on the chandelier. Also—and here’s the best part—diversity win! Trans Phantom! 

this is only part of it, give me feedback so i can edit it please!