currently writing a story

it's a dystopian story, I've written 1 chapter so far and I'm working on the second one. here's the link the place with no name

if it doesn't work the name of the story is: the place with no name and the user is randomnessyay3345 (I made the account when I was 10 T-T)

I'm completely open to critiques on my grammar or word choices